please your help would be apperciated

Dear Mr. Tony and Dr Rasheed,
first of all i would like to be again a member of the new weblog ieltscoumminty 10 please Tony send me your invitationSecondly i will post this essaywhich i need to apply for advance education , look forward to seeing your precious corrections and cooments250-word essay explaining why the EMHCA (Executive Master Health Care Administration) degree is important to you? (This is one of the requirements in my master application)It is indisputable, that experience is very important to work, fourteen years experience I have had from tertiary 1000 beds hospital in Saudi, in addition to four years managerial experience. No one can deny that Executive Master Health Care Administration (EMCHA) Degree will empower my career, in this essay I will look at the importance of Mater Degree to my profession.I am blessed with a true of the value of the Master degree, it is important to me on personal and occupational levels, such people that drive our world to success every day and make it a better place. Applying for EMHCA degree is a big leap in approaching my potential, as it will prove me to make the most of my careerHowever, I have exposed to managerial issues since 2002, and have acquired a sense of duties and responsibilities , my accumulated practice and experience proved that I can do more efficient , this quality target , irrefutable that composed of two essential ingredients , the first being pratice the second is advance knowledge , as I believe ,that EMHCA degree is my ticket to the second . I m embarking on such mission, because I, by nature, m not settler, as I see it, knowledge is a life-long road not bounded by age number.Furthermore, the journey to earn this degree is granted to me, it will prove to be a primary milestone throughout my life in seeking to learn , I feel that to lead people toward the right way and be trustful , I should expand my knowledge , so I must genuinely earn the duty ,the trust and title they trust me with. I place the trust they have in me as one of my initial priorities in this profession for extraordinary reward of earning their valuable respect and confidence on meIn light of the above ,EMHCA degree is very important to upgrade my profession and to enable me performing my mission successfully and efficiently, thereby I will feel at the end of the day I am accomplishing my role toward my subordinates
Rasmieh Zeidan

please your help would be apperciated

Dear Mr. Tony and Dr Rasheed,
First of all,I would like to be (again) a member of the new weblog ieltscoumminty 10, again. Please, Tony, send me your invitation.
Secondly, I (will) shall post this essay, which I need to apply for advance education. Looking forward to seeing your precious corrections and comments.


250-word essay explaining why the EMHCA (Executive Master
Health Care Administration) degree is important to you? (This is one of the requirements in my master application)


It is indisputable(,)(G) that experience is very important to work. (fourteen years experience I have had from tertiary 1000 beds hospital in Saudi,) In addition to four years of managerial work, I have fourteen years of administrative experience in a 1000 bed tertiary-care hospital in Saudi Arabia.(No one can deny that) (Please, tone down your rhetoric) I am sure that Executive Master Health Care Administration (EMCHA) Degree will empower my career.(G) In this essay, I shall look at the importance of Master Degree to my profession.(Do you want to discuss the importance of the degree or experience to your profession?The title demands to establish the importance of your degree to you and support it with examples.)

I am blessed with (a true) the truth of the value of the Master degree, it is important to me on personal (and) as well as occupational levels.(G) (such people that drive our world to success every day and make it a better place.) (The sentence does not fit in the context. Does it?) Applying for EMHCA degree is a big leap in approaching my potential, as it will (prove)(WC) help me (to)(G) make the most of my career


(However) Owing to my degree, I have been exposed to managerial issues since 2002, and I have acquired a sense of (duties) duty and (responsibilities) responsibilty. My accumulated practice and experience has proved that I can do more efficiently.(Please, check adverb and adjective) This quality target , (irrefutable) ( Rhetoric!) (that) composed of two essential ingredients: the first being pratice and the second, advanced knowledge. As I believe ,the EMHCA degree is my ticket to the second . I am embarking on such a mission, because I, by nature, am not settler. As I see it, knowledge is a life-long (road)(WC) journey (not bounded)(WC) unaffected by age. (number.)


Furthermore, the (journey)(WC) opportunity to earn this degree (is)has been granted to me, it will prove to be a primary milestone throughout my life in seeking to learn. I feel that, in order to lead people towards the right way and to be trustworthy , I should expand my knowledge. So, I must genuinely earn the duty ,the trust and the title they trust me with. I place the trust(Repetition) they have in me as one of my initial priorities in this profession for extraordinary reward of earning their valuable respect and confidence in me.


In (light of the above) conclusion ,EMHCA degree is very important to upgrade my profession and to enable me perform(ing) my mission successfully and efficiently, so that I feel, at the end of the day, that I am accomplishing my role toward my subordinates.

Well done, again.
Keep posting!

The last post?

Campers

The caravan has moved on. The new weblog is: www.ieltstears.blogspot.com

Let's hope there will be tears of joy!

Your lack of response to my recent postings and Muthu's very kind report is disappointing, but not surprising.Everyone and anyone is welcome to join the new weblog: ieltscommunity10 (blog number 24243792). Blogmember has been invited and I will re-invite anyone who wants to join.As you are all 'in the groove', your advice and encouragement would be fabulous for my new IELTS Prep class starting tomorrow. What about all those good intentions? This is a very constructive way to keep in touch, we are, or most likely were, a community - remember?

That's all from me.I'll leave you alone now, you must have a lot on your plates at the moment!

Bye

Tony

Pathiran (Muthu) - IELTS Listening, Reading & Writing - General Training Module

Class

I have edited slightly Pathiran's (Muthu) IELTS (General Training) report. He has taken the trouble to send me his comments and advice. If you guys are 'serious', you would be well advised to read through this report and learn from it!

I'm still waiting to hear from you! Winter is over! You can come out of hibernation now!

ieltscommunity10 will be created over the weekend, you're welcome to join (but if you haven't supported your own weblog...??? - ah well!)

Enjoy the weekend and weather before it gets too hot (literally and metaphorically!)

Reactions, please!

Tony


Subject: My IELTS Listening, Reading & Writing tests held on the 11 March 2006.

Dear Mr.Tony and classmates,


Please accept my experience on the IELTS Listening, Reading and Writing examinations held on the Saturday 11 March 2006 as follows.

The venue for the examination was changed from the Rotana Hotel to The British Council. There was no problem because the information on the change of venue has been intimated on the same day of the Speaking test.

I had started from home with my mind filled with confidence and joy as I had had a good night’s sleep for slightly less then seven hours, reached the venue at 7.45am and waited outside the gate along with few other candidates until the gate was opened at 8am.The location of of my examination room and seat could be identified from the information board.
In the examination room the candidates were received by the Invigilator who advised everyone to hand over her their belongings and asked to carry ID, pen, pencil and eraser. On the table, each candidate’s name, roll number, code of the first language and type of examination were written. The answer sheet for the Listening and Reading was kept on the table. The Invigilator read out the time keeping instructions along with useful advice (such as try to answer all questions as wrong answers do not carry negative marks) and the do's and dont's for the Listening test. She also tested the level of the audio in order to be heard by every one seated. It took about 30 minutes for the candidates to settle down and all instructions given by the Invigilator. The test commenced at 9am as scheduled.

The Listening test started with a recording of a conversation (Q&A session) between a representative of a real estate company and a client who wants to rent a house. The time was given for writing the answer on the question sheet followed by 10 minutes of time to transfer the answers from the question sheets to the answer sheet. I had answered all the questions with ease and my time management was good. Since I had answered all questions with ease my confidence level had increased after finishing the listening test and got ready to face the Reading test. I was happy!

The GT Reading test contents were simpler in the starting sections and were harder in the last 2 sections due to its scientific phrases and large paragraphs with lots of information in it. I had problem in my time management because I took excessive time in first 2 sections and did not answer two questions at the end as well as having had to do some guess work. I think and suggest that answering the questions from the last sections in first is better like writing the part 2 first in the writing test. Bit of a disappointment!

I went to the rest room and came back with a fresh attitude by forgetting what had happened in the reading test. I settled down in the gap period prior while the Examiner collected the answer sheets from all candidates.

GT Writing test: Task 1(150words) was for writing a letter to a book distributor about a delay in the delivery of the book regarding “Why was the book delivery delayed?” “Why is the book important to you?” And “What do you want them to do”?

GT Writing Task 2 (250words): “The beauty of natural places such as beaches, mountain peaks and lakes is spoiled by people littering and throwing rubbish and cans. Why do people do that? What should governments do?” Give your experience as well.
I did the task 2 first in 40 minutes in 3 pages with an additional sheet I took from the Invigilator and later did the task -1 in 20 minutes.Thus the time was managed well. I was satisfied!

To summarize, my main strengths and confidence builders were from the IELTS preparation course conducted by Mr Tony Beale and my day-to-day use of English at home ,work place and in society.

IN BRIEF, PRACTISE. THINK POSITIVELY. GO WITH CONFIDENCE. FACE THE QUESTIONS BOLDLY. ANSWER THE ONES YOU KNOW FIRST, SKIP THE ONES YOU CANNOT ANSWER AND COME BACK TO THEM LATER. MOST IMPORTANTLY, MANAGE YOUR TIME!

I sincerely trust that the above information is of use to you and please forgive me for any errors.
I wish you all the best for your success in your forthcoming IELTS examinations and hope to meet you sometime in the future,

Have a good day,

Yours sincerely,

Muthu

Pathiran Sorimuthu sorimuthup@yahoo.com

Plus ca change . . . (c'est la meme chose!)

Hi there!

See, all those good intentions . . . Those freed up evenings have hopefully been spent in the Learning Zone. In the absence of any news / comments / feedback, I assume that you are all catching your breath.

I recommend that you join my new weblog, which I will set up today or tomorrow. This is intended for the next class, but you guys can contribute (if you want to!) I'll be posting full details of the new weblog in due course.


Ah well, we started with a flourish, but ended with a whimper. Will ieltscommunity10 be different? We shall see.

Pathiran hopes to send me his report on IELTS GT modules for: Listening/Reading/Writing - stand by for that (he seems to be someone who actions what he intends...)

It would be polite if someone from ieltscommunity9 at least comments on this post, let alone take the initiative to post something useful.

Life goes on.

Good luck


Tony

The window is closing ...

Well class, former class actually, you have taken your eyes off the ball already!

I have some free time this week, but you haven't taken advantage of this opportunity.

I start a new IELTS class on Saturday and will be very pre-occupied thereafter. I cannot guarantee a speedy response to any writing work submitted - such is life! Good old Dr Rashid is there ready to help, unless you are all too 'wet'!

Got to take Zeena to her violin lesson, bye!

Tony

Dear Dr Rashid /Mr. Tony
I would like to appreciate your great help to me by (auditing)editing my essay .I promise to re-write it (again) (either re-write or write again) and post , you don’t know how much (do I need) help and (a) support do I need to upgrade my English language not only for passing IELTS exam but in general as well.
Words are not enough to convey how much your efforts mean to me


Thank you again

Rasmieh Zeidan

GOOD LUCK TO ALL

Dear Mr. Pathiran,
thank you for the useful feed back . Ii wish you all the best for the rest of the exam
please keep up

Rasmieh

Speaking Test on 9th.March 2006 by Pathiran Sorimuthu

Dear Mr.Tony and Classmates, Greetings! It is good to know all of you through The IELTS preparation course.I have the pleasure in sharing with you my experience on the speaking test as follows, I went to the test venue(The British council) direct from my office without consuming my regular lunch.I was received by the TBC staff ,they asked to identify myself , sign in a form and told me to wait in the sitting area at 2PM.The tentative test time given to me was 3.40PM and informed that the actual test time could be earlier than that. The academic candidates are much higher than General ones. At 3.00PM,I was lead to the entrance of the examination room and asked to be seated right next to the door until the examiner comes out and receive me.The waiting time was 10minutes at this place. Finally the examiner came to receive me with greeting.He lead me to the examination room and was asked to be seated opposite to him.Prior to starting the conversation with me he did the speech recording himself for the name of the candidate, date of test,venue and type of the test module. Please find below the questions asked by the examiner, How can i call you ?where are you from?what are you?which part of Abu dhabi do you live?who lives with you,with friends or with your family?what do you like and dislike about the location of your house?are you happy in living in the area?what is the speciality in the area?do you meet people from different countries and are you happy in meeting them?are you planning to shift your residence to another place in the near future?where do you like to watch a movie,in the theatre or at home and why? where do students meet during their leisure time in these days?where do the students used to meet in the olden days?why some children are doing good and some are not?what is your advise for the well being of children?what should we do to improve the skills of the students appart from the regular school education? The examiner gives me the following speaking task to speak for 2minutes and told me that he may interrupt me to ask some questions. how did you learn to speak English?where did you learn?how often do you use English?why do you use English?where do you use English? do you like to go for the same job when you migrate to Canada?will you be happy to see people from different countries in Canada? The examiner stopped asking questions and said to me that the test is completed.I conveyed my thanks to the examiner and left the examination room. I should not forget to mention here that the IELTS preparation course did help me to face my Speaking test with confidence.Thank you Mr.Tony. I would also be posting my experience on the Listening,Reading and Writing test after the completion of my examinations on the 11th.March 2006. I believe that the above narration is informative and do appologise for any errors in my writing. Have a good weekend and best wishes for your foreth coming IELTS examinations ! Best regards Pathiran Sorimuthu(Muthu) sorimuthup@yahoo.com

The show must go on . . . and on ???

Dear Ieltslearners

The time has come, we approach our last session in room 7. I hope you all come - I'll have your certificates; a final end-of-course questionnaire; 'that' joke; you'll give me back your NATIONAL GEOGRAPHIC magazines; we'll have a forum on your last writing and the tests yesterday; I'll talk about SPEAKING [Jamal is prepared to do a live speaking test in front of you all]; there is the final Listening from the purple Cambridge Test Book and I'll show you a marvellous photo of the Beale family (I promise!)

So, what next? I start a new IELTS 'Mission Possible' course on 18 March, In Sha Allah. The blog will continue in the meantime. Use blogmember to post any messages (email me for the username/password if necessary.) What are your plans? Why not make study groups to work together in the Learning Zone?

Thank you AHMED ALI! We hope for good news very soon. Will anyone be prepared to come and talk to my next class? Wow, that would be great!

I know I am a hard taskmaster. I expect a lot from you, myself, my family and that I can be impatient, tough, grumpy and intolerant of excuse makers - but hey, I never pretended to be perfect!

Anyway, you have a lot to digest. Let it sink in and have a go at IELTS before you lose your nerve. OK, so after 1st May there is no 90 day rule, but make some study programme to work on your IELTS weaknesses.

It would be lovely to have a reaction from you guys, but that seems unlikely . . .

Ah well, see you tonight for our swan song!!!

Over to you

Tony

should the wealthy countries help the poor nations ?

Should the wealthy countries help the poor nations?

Today, it is (seems to be a) debatable (issue about) who is responsible for (of) the poor countries in the world. Is it the responsibility of the third world nations or the wealthy government for (about) the big gap between rich and poor people? This essay will look at the arguments for and against helping poor nations. (Resmieh, have you corrected the mistakes I had highlighted?) [Fairly standard opening, clear thesis - does she deliver?]

There are many reasons for helping poor countries; first of all, there are humanitarian aspects (reasons), such as charity foundations, as religious obligations toward the poor countries. However, many rich countries donate money for political reasons, in order to get a good influence in poor governments' affairs (designs). In this way, they are able to control the supply of oil and other raw material resources. Moreover, the wealthy nations want to ensure markets for their own goods (produces) such as computers, TV, cars, clothes and so on. [Strong stuff, nothing wrong with having opinions, is there?]

Therefore, aid is not necessarily the best method to support a country, as I heard recently that the billions of dollars of aid do(does) not always reach the poor people who are really deserve it! On the other hand, charities in crisis situations do not (doesn’t) solve the existing poverty problem. In my view, (Hereby), there are many other ways to solve this problem such as, opening up a free market, allowing the third world countries to sell their products by themselves, removing restrictions from trade, letting developing countries (them) (to) buy the educational tools with low price . [Wait a minute, where are the arguments FOR rich countries helping the poorer ones? This is a 'for and against' / 'pros and cons' essay, isn't it? You have only argued, very convincingly, AGAINST the case for aid. Maybe the thesis should be changed?]

In conclusion , although there are many people supporting aid to (the help of the) poor nations , I strongly feel that the third world (they) can manage by themselves , just leave them alone without masking support. [This is all very well, but you have not given any evidence how the poor countries can support themselves and avoid being exploited by the richer countries. It seems to me that your 'rhetoric' gets the better of you and this is not a balanced essay. Nevertheless I applaud you for posting this work on the weblog and for blazing the trail for the slackers in the class!]

Lessons to be learned:

1. There is NO need to always have the automatic 'for and against' / 'pros and cons' argument essay.
2. Make sure the conclusion backs up and complements the introduction.
3. It is a worthwhile exercise to re-write your work on the weblog and get even more detailed feedback - especially as it is the weekend and you have some extra time to reflect and so do I!


Please I’ll be more than happy to read your comments and advice.

Any further comments, Dr Rashid?

Dear tony,
I missed the train today.

Although, there is no room for my input after your comments, I have a few things to say.

Rasmieh's maiden attempt is appreciable. More practice will polish her writing.

The concordance between intro and conclusion needs to be improved.

The positives of her essay are:
1- Her brave initiative to write and post on the blog. "A JOURNEY OF THOUSAND MILES STARTS WITH A SINGLE STEP.'
2- The format of the essay with 3:5:5:3 sentence intro, body and conclusion.
3- Content and clear opinion.

The areas to improve:
1- Grammar
2- Vocabulary
3- Cohesion and coherence.
Rashid Saleem



Thanks
Rasmieh

Bravo, Resmieh for taking this courageous step!

Over and out

Tony

Thank God It's Wednesday...

Hello people!

OK, no nagging, no complaining, no 'yellow cards'!!!

I know you're out there! You are relaxing and enjoying the start of the weekend for some, almost the weekend for others.

Have you looked at the handouts I gave you last night? How about re-writing a task 2 essay and posting it on the weblog? I think Dr Rashid has given up on you lot (I can't blame him!)

Don't switch off! Keep your focus and 'edge' going for the final week of the course. I'll still be around for you after we finish, but past experience tells me that you will be swallowed up by the 'duniya' and the best intentions in the world come to . . .

As things stand it looks like the Learning Zone is available tomorrow, Thursday - Young Leaners have classes in the morning and there is preparation for Computer Based IELTS in the afternoon. However, call the Front Desk at the BC and try to book one of the two PCs kept for outside use - it's 02 6910600, you can always work as a pair on ONE pc!!!. Between 2.00 and 5.00pm every afternoon, the learning Zone is always free. This evening, Wednesday, the Learning Zone is free up till 8.00pm - so how about it? (I just called the Front Desk).

After you finish with me (oh what a sad prospect!), you are still entitled to use the Learning Zone until you take the IELTS - bear that in mind!

OK guys, over to you and well done the Ain3wis!

Stand by for any further up-dates from yours truly

Tony